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Cloud in a Bottle 1

How is it your voice is a canyon which cuts
where you did not even speak, opening the rivers
of my lungs so they could cataract, could rage with breath
you breathed? That the rock swells of your ribs, washed
round and floating, met then barred the way with mine
so that my heart, turned to tides, could not slip by,
and beat against the walls, unanswered, ‘til it drowned?

And that I still don’t hate you, even now?

There’s all this nonsense of lips and bubbles, that’s fine;
still refuse drifts in one direction all the same, refusing—
shored up maybe by some reassuring echoes still unsung—
to sink, so like an opened blouse colored by brine, my hope
finds refuge at the highest point, and lays itself unlocked
on barren sand to fade, suffuse with light, the way all things
in the desert turn finally, achingly white.
A little more personal than normal. Ergo, more vague than ever.

I never set out to write things that paint themselves like French girls sonnets. This just happens.

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Edit: Um wow! My fourth lit DD! Thanks so much to ^Beccalicious for featuring this, and to everyone who comments or favorites. I will try my best to respond to everyone personally over the next day or so. Thank you so much again! :heart: :heart:
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plutosub Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013
it is vague, but it's nice. I feel like I can assign my own meaning to it, and that's okay. Lovely job~
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SimplySilent Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013
Beautiful :heart: Congrats on the DD! :clap:
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KaitForest Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013   Writer
so damn beautiful
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SilenttPrincess Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Wow you really deserve th DD It's amazing!
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013
Beautiful work, congrats on the DD! :heart:
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languit Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
The imagery in this is lovely. Congrats on the DD, it's definitely deserved.
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz: :iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
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Adonael Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The picturesque title really drew me in and the poem itself is wonderfully melodious. Good show!
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AyeAye12 Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Student Writer
Damn, this is good. I like the imagery used ("your voice is a canyon which cuts" was very impressive).

Personal and powerful, I like it :)
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